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<div class="value" contenteditable="false"><span style="color: #262626; font-family: 'Helvetica Neue'; font-size: 16px; font-style: normal; font-variant-ligatures: normal; font-variant-caps: normal; font-weight: 400; letter-spacing: normal; orphans: 2; text-align: start; text-indent: 0px; text-transform: none; widows: 2; word-spacing: 0px; -webkit-text-stroke-width: 0px; white-space: normal; background-color: #ffffff; text-decoration-thickness: initial; text-decoration-style: initial; text-decoration-color: initial; display: inline !important; float: none;">薩格勒布大學交換;課程實驗:草魚魚片的微凍保鮮及其鮮度變化;課程實驗:魚類基因組DNA的提取、擴增、重組與轉化;湖北省武漢市野芷湖漁業(yè)資源與環(huán)境調查報告;課程實驗:蛋白酶產生菌的分離、鑒定、選育與培養(yǎng);大學生創(chuàng)新創(chuàng)業(yè)訓練計劃項目(省級)pdzk1ip1基因調控斑馬魚雄性性別決定和分化的研究;畢業(yè)設計:蛋氨酸硒對黃顙魚肌肉脂肪代謝相關酶的影響</span></div>
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<div class="value" contenteditable="false"><span style="color: #262626; font-family: 'Helvetica Neue'; font-size: 16px; font-style: normal; font-variant-ligatures: normal; font-variant-caps: normal; font-weight: 400; letter-spacing: normal; orphans: 2; text-align: start; text-indent: 0px; text-transform: none; widows: 2; word-spacing: 0px; -webkit-text-stroke-width: 0px; white-space: normal; background-color: #ffffff; text-decoration-thickness: initial; text-decoration-style: initial; text-decoration-color: initial; display: inline !important; float: none;">中國科學院水生生物研究所實習生、海南搏翱生物科技有限公司蝦苗繁育技術員;<span style="color: #262626; font-family: 'PingFang SC', 'Microsoft Yahei', 'Microsoft Yahei UI', 'Segoe UI', Tahoma, SimSun, sans-serif, 'Hiragino Sans GB'; font-size: 16px; font-style: normal; font-variant-ligatures: normal; font-variant-caps: normal; font-weight: 400; letter-spacing: normal; orphans: 2; text-align: start; text-indent: 0px; text-transform: none; widows: 2; word-spacing: 0px; -webkit-text-stroke-width: 0px; white-space: normal; background-color: #ffffff; text-decoration-thickness: initial; text-decoration-style: initial; text-decoration-color: initial; display: inline !important; float: none;">湖北農科院實習生</span></span></div>
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<h1><span style="color: #ffffff;"><strong>提綱準備</strong></span></h1>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;">我與W同學的接觸始于23年7月底。初次溝通后,我驚訝于W同學豐富的學術經歷。<strong>盡管他申請項目多樣化,涵蓋生物技術、生物多樣性、食品安全和食品科學四個方向,但他的經歷與這些方向都很契合</strong>。</span></p>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;">因此,我首先對W同學的經歷進行了篩選和分類,并指導他填寫相應素材,梳理了文書寫作思路。</span></p>
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<p style="color: #666666; font-style: italic; text-align: center; font-size: 14px;"><span style="color: #262626;"><em>整理文書思路</em></span></p>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;">進入文書寫作階段,鑒于W同學豐富的經歷,撰寫一篇能夠體現W同學專業(yè)能力的文書并不難。<strong>然而,我關注的重點是如何讓文書更貼合申請項目,同時避免堆砌經歷,使文章脈絡更清晰、更具可讀性</strong>。</span></p>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;">以下,便是我對倫敦大學學院生物化學工程理學碩士的寫作思路。</span></p>
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<h1><span style="color: #ffffff;"><strong>項目解讀</strong></span></h1>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;">倫敦大學學院生物化學工程理學碩士項目由化學工程師協會(IChemE)認證,專注于將生命科學的進步轉化為實際過程或產品的核心生物化學工程原理。該項目在就業(yè)市場上有很大的潛力和廣泛的發(fā)展前景。</span></p>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;"><strong>除了要求申請者具備生物化學、分子生物學和化學工程等理論基礎,該項目尤其注重申請者的實驗室技能和應用能力。</strong></span></p>
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<p style="color: #666666; font-style: italic; text-align: center; font-size: 14px;"><span style="color: #262626;"><em>該項目對申請者個人陳述的要求</em></span></p>
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<h1><span style="color: #ffffff;"><strong>文書創(chuàng)作</strong></span></h1>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;">基于項目解讀和個人陳述要求,我構思了W同學的文書框架,以時間為線索,展示W同學對生物化學工程的逐漸深入理解。文書以對3D生物打印和細胞培養(yǎng)技術的關注作為引子,引出了W同學對生化工程領域的興趣。</span></p>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;">然而,僅舉這樣的例子是不夠吸引人的,<strong>因此我特別強調了W同學為進一步了解相關創(chuàng)新應用所閱讀的前沿文獻,并特別提到了他研讀UCL一位教授的研究論文,展示了他對行業(yè)發(fā)展的關注和個人思考</strong>。</span></p>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;">在接下來的核心部分,我選擇了W同學的大創(chuàng)項目《pdzk1ip1基因調控斑馬魚雄性性別決定和分化的研究》以及關于蛋白酶產生菌的分離、鑒定、選育與培養(yǎng)的課程實驗來展示他的科研能力。</span></p>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;"><strong>這兩個項目側重點不同,前者通過對具體實驗步驟的詳細闡述展示了W同學在分子生物學和基因編輯領域的專業(yè)技能,同時強調了他對實驗細節(jié)的嚴謹關注和對實驗失敗風險的認識,以展現他的科學嚴謹性</strong>。</span></p>
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<p style="color: #666666; font-style: italic; text-align: center; font-size: 14px;"><span style="color: #262626;"><em>文書節(jié)選</em></span></p>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;">對于后者,我將重點放在W同學作為團隊領導者在實驗過程中展示的<strong>問題解決能力和團隊合作能力</strong>。此外,我還補充了W同學的實習經歷,以證明他的<strong>理論應用能力和創(chuàng)新能力</strong>。這些技能在現代生物化學工程領域非常重要。</span></p>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;">除此之外,在文章的后半部分,我并沒有將W同學的職業(yè)規(guī)劃放在最后一個部分,而是與前文的經歷相呼應,與擇校原因交織在一起進行闡述,使整個文書的邏輯自洽且連接緊密。脫離職業(yè)規(guī)劃,過往經歷即使與申請專業(yè)再匹配,對招生官來說也是虛無縹緲的。<strong>同樣,職業(yè)規(guī)劃也并非一蹴而就,它是個人在成長過程中不斷探索的結果。這樣的處理也能從側面反映W同學對生物化學工程領域的不斷深化理解</strong>。</span></p>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;">值得一提的是,在整個文書寫作過程中,我與W同學始終保持著密切的溝通。無論是框架結構還是用詞,W同學都能及時與我探討他的想法。正是有了這種密切合作,最終的文書成稿才能在展現專業(yè)度的同時更具個性化。</span></p>
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<p><span style="color: #262626;">W同學的所有申請項目最終在十二月初全部完成并提交,并在12月底收到了<strong>倫敦大學學院生物化學工程理學碩士的offer</strong>。我由衷為他感到高興!</span></p>
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